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We took off our coats and ran quickly into the lemon spring. When I first put my feet into the water. I cried out, "Wow, it is hot!" I didn't know the water was so hot, and I was a little afraid that it would burn me...So I walked carefully into the spring. One step,two... I felt the heat slowly climbing up my body.
我们脱下外套，快速奔向柠檬泉，当我第一次把脚伸进水中时，我大声喊道：“哇，水是热的！”我一开始不知道水如此热，所以我有点儿担心会被热水烫到。于是，我小心翼翼地走进温泉，一步，两步......我能感觉到热量慢慢地进入我的身体。
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